RockBiter posted a comment on Saturday 6th September 2008 11:42am for Chapter 33 - The Battle of Little Hangleton

This was a very well-written battle. Clear and believable. I like the way you're going back to subplots to pick up on action that is going on simultaneously.

Abraxan replied:

Thanks a lot!   I'm glad you liked the battle and the sub-plots!

Abraxan

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Friday 23rd May 2008 3:46pm for Chapter 33 - The Battle of Little Hangleton

Good chapter.

gunny

Abraxan replied:

Thanks!

Abraxan

MonkeyAxman1302 posted a comment on Tuesday 14th August 2007 5:05am for Chapter 33 - The Battle of Little Hangleton

Don't you love the fact that you were right? Even Rowling had the Statues, and suits of armor, and gargoyles attacked Voldie's forces in Book 7.
You had the same idea! Thats just cool!
Thanks for writing.
Monkey

Abraxan replied:

When HBP came out, some of my readers and I made actual LISTS of how many things I'd guessed right (both of my novels were online before HBP was published - well, nearly all of ToD was online by then, anyway).   Yeah, when she had the statues and gargoyles and suits of armor go out ot protect the castle, I said, "YEAH!   I was right!"   LOL!   Glad you enjoyed that!

Abraxan

Sonicdale posted a comment on Friday 23rd December 2005 4:58pm for Chapter 33 - The Battle of Little Hangleton

OKay.
I've waited 33 chapters to do a review, and I'm glad I did.
The whole first act with Casey and Harry together was nice - but the foreshadowing of her dying kind of put the kabash on my getting into hger character. Brilliant emotion, though, and I'm hoping Harry will continue his artwork.

The most interesting things are noted below that encompass the last 20 chapters or so:

1. Ron isn't the biggest git when it comes to Gin. He's grown up a bit - somewhat off camera though. You gave him some angst when Gin got hurt a few times, and I like him well here.

2. Snape. He's still a smarmy slime. He's helping Harry now - and I'm not exactly sure why. I guess it's because he has too, and I'm sure that a reckoning is coming.

3. Quidditch. I'm a sucker for it, and I like what I've seen. You've got a good grasp for Harry's flying skills, so I'm happy to see any of it. Since Madam Hooch messed with the snitch, are we going to have a rematch? Hm.

4. Draco. Why isn't he dead? And if Harry saw Draco take the Dark Mark, why didn't Dumbledore stop him and the others from coming into the school? "Turn down your sleeves, Mr. Malfoy."

5. Hermione is spot on - and I like her not so much overbearing as she is written in other fanfics. She seems concerned and such - but I sure wish we could see some more of her billiance.

6. Harry's temper. Like the 'focus' he gets when he gets mad. I've noticed myself that.

7. Animagus forms. Sounds as if Harry is going to try something strange soon - like a dragon or some other big animal. Like the raven. BTW, if Harry was trying to hide from the DEs in the battle of Little Hangleton, why didn't he turn into a dragonfly? It's small, hard to see in the dark - I mean, he could land on a tree branch next to some leaves and NEVER be seen. Hm.

8. The battle and action sequences are great. Loved seeing Voldey getting a 'hot foot' by Harry making lava on TOm's feet in France. And the wandless Harry's doing there at the end is great.

9. Curious. The prophecy hasn't been batted around like it has in other fanfics. You've made it more of a subtext instead of the main driving point. Good idea, that.

10. Sex. I applaud the 'fade to black' stuff. Call me old fashioned - I was hoping that they wouldn't just hop in the sack and doink each other because they could - but I'm glad you didn't throw PWP at us.

11. Lastly, this fic has 7 more chapters to go. I'll save my reviews of those chapters until the end.

Thanks for a great story. Merry Christmas. Hope the sequel (is there one?) turns out well, and that your writing continues. Last thought: I felt as if your first few chapters weren't written as well as the last, oh, say dozen. I get the distinct feeling that you're learning and improving. Good work.

Wooster posted a comment on Saturday 3rd December 2005 6:53pm for Chapter 33 - The Battle of Little Hangleton

Three battles in this chapter, and each amazingly well done. Ron's strategizing was simply brilliant, as were the twins' bombs in the battle of Little Hangleton, I would dearly love to have seen the battle at Hogwarts. All those gargoyles, Grawp, and the knights...I bet Fleur will feel silly for making fun of them ("We would never allow zees kind of zing at Beauxbatons" etc). That battle sounded absolutely amazing. The scariest battle is the medical one. Nothing's scarier than a battle where the enemy isn't an actual physical being but injuries.

Great writing. But now I'm exhausted. It's almost two in the morning and I am going to bed. 'Night!

The Resident posted a comment on Friday 11th November 2005 7:38pm for Chapter 33 - The Battle of Little Hangleton

Don't you dare let Harry die; I'd really hate to have to hex you.