Victor1 posted a comment on Saturday 25th February 2006 1:14pm

dammit this is written so well!

just thought i had to say it haha

now on to more reading!

Abraxan replied:

LOL! Thanks a lot! I appreciate your saying that!

Abraxan

fanfic posted a comment on Saturday 25th February 2006 2:35am

very interesting set up for the first chapter. It's too bad that Harry can't make it to gringott's and add some additional funds for him to use with his bank card!!!

Abraxan replied:

Yeah, that would be handy, wouldn't it? Glad you liked the chapter!

Abraxan

Victor1 posted a comment on Thursday 23rd February 2006 3:06pm

damn this was a very sad, but well written chapter.

well done.

Abraxan replied:

thanks!

Abraxan

Victor1 posted a comment on Thursday 23rd February 2006 2:28pm

aww dang! i liked casey and her family a lot

even though i kind of knew this was coming

can't wait to read the rest

Abraxan replied:

Thanks! I'm glad you liked Casey and her family!

Abraxan

ShadeHawk posted a comment on Saturday 18th February 2006 5:54am

Truly wonderfull story.

Abraxan replied:

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Abraxan

snuffles007 posted a comment on Wednesday 8th February 2006 5:33am

Fantastic story! I'm going to start reading the sequel right now! Keep up the great writing!

Abraxan replied:

Thanks a lot! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Abraxan

Sen1 posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd January 2006 10:36am

Wow, that was a fabulously indepth story, I loved the sheer amount of detail that was used to create all of the scenes. I wish I had something more specific to comment on but the things that jumped out at me were all positive, though come to think about it I was a little surprised by Dumbledore, not that he was out of character more so that you kept him so tightly in the role, don't ask me why but I have somehow gotten used to Harry hating Albus instead of them getting along, guess I read a bit too much fan-fiction. Anyway I just wanted to say great story and now I'm going to go read The Time of Destiny.

Imp posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 7:01pm

First of all, I'm a git for not reviewing until I reached the end of the story. Now that that's out of the way, I can continue.
Second, I love the wandless magic. A friend and I have been arguing about whether Harry will be able to defeat Voldy with "unfocused" magic or not, but you seem to give him a great deal of control with it because of the refiners fire. I like it.
Third, I miss Casey. She was such a well-developed character. Oh well. You did what you had to.
Fourth, I like the way you've pulled Ginny and Harry together. Their relationship is very much like mine and my girlfriends. I find Harry saying some of the same things I say. The irony in your story is sometimes too much though. Just before I found your story, I bought my girlfriend a gold ruby necklace. When I read that Harry got Ginny something so similar, I nearly woke everyone in the house up with my laughter.
Fifth and final, I like mischevious!Harry. He reminds me so much of myself because I've actually done some of the things he does in your story. Ginny's learned a lot from the twins too. Together, she and Harry are likely to get into trouble eventually.
Love the story, and can't wait to see what happens in 'Destiny'

Elfguard48 posted a comment on Monday 2nd January 2006 8:09am

I like the way you write the love scences. It is such a caring way. I really never liked the step by way some writers do. Maybe thats why I love to old movies. I love the way you set the scene up and leave the rest to the readers mind.

Sonicdale posted a comment on Friday 23rd December 2005 5:57pm

Just a quick thought:

When I gave my wife her ring, I do remember a lot of female squeals and squeaks and jumping up and down - and giggling and gasps and so on.

Thanks for bringing back that memory.

This is getting along well. Love the rings.
And that McGonnagal is hot? Snarky.
Good work.

Sonicdale posted a comment on Friday 23rd December 2005 4:58pm

OKay.
I've waited 33 chapters to do a review, and I'm glad I did.
The whole first act with Casey and Harry together was nice - but the foreshadowing of her dying kind of put the kabash on my getting into hger character. Brilliant emotion, though, and I'm hoping Harry will continue his artwork.

The most interesting things are noted below that encompass the last 20 chapters or so:

1. Ron isn't the biggest git when it comes to Gin. He's grown up a bit - somewhat off camera though. You gave him some angst when Gin got hurt a few times, and I like him well here.

2. Snape. He's still a smarmy slime. He's helping Harry now - and I'm not exactly sure why. I guess it's because he has too, and I'm sure that a reckoning is coming.

3. Quidditch. I'm a sucker for it, and I like what I've seen. You've got a good grasp for Harry's flying skills, so I'm happy to see any of it. Since Madam Hooch messed with the snitch, are we going to have a rematch? Hm.

4. Draco. Why isn't he dead? And if Harry saw Draco take the Dark Mark, why didn't Dumbledore stop him and the others from coming into the school? "Turn down your sleeves, Mr. Malfoy."

5. Hermione is spot on - and I like her not so much overbearing as she is written in other fanfics. She seems concerned and such - but I sure wish we could see some more of her billiance.

6. Harry's temper. Like the 'focus' he gets when he gets mad. I've noticed myself that.

7. Animagus forms. Sounds as if Harry is going to try something strange soon - like a dragon or some other big animal. Like the raven. BTW, if Harry was trying to hide from the DEs in the battle of Little Hangleton, why didn't he turn into a dragonfly? It's small, hard to see in the dark - I mean, he could land on a tree branch next to some leaves and NEVER be seen. Hm.

8. The battle and action sequences are great. Loved seeing Voldey getting a 'hot foot' by Harry making lava on TOm's feet in France. And the wandless Harry's doing there at the end is great.

9. Curious. The prophecy hasn't been batted around like it has in other fanfics. You've made it more of a subtext instead of the main driving point. Good idea, that.

10. Sex. I applaud the 'fade to black' stuff. Call me old fashioned - I was hoping that they wouldn't just hop in the sack and doink each other because they could - but I'm glad you didn't throw PWP at us.

11. Lastly, this fic has 7 more chapters to go. I'll save my reviews of those chapters until the end.

Thanks for a great story. Merry Christmas. Hope the sequel (is there one?) turns out well, and that your writing continues. Last thought: I felt as if your first few chapters weren't written as well as the last, oh, say dozen. I get the distinct feeling that you're learning and improving. Good work.

zephyr_goddess posted a comment on Wednesday 21st December 2005 12:07am

Oh! I loved it! The whole thing was nice! You should publish it at more places like quizilla or fanfiction! I'm sure you'll get loads of reviews!

John Burrage posted a comment on Monday 19th December 2005 2:32pm

Just a quick question before i finish reading. your "brilliant Brit-picker, Kelpie" just nags about the British stuff you got wrong, right?

Amamama posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 7:11am

Ouch! Somebody step on that nasty bug, please? Wonderful chapter, and I'll just hurry over to the next...

Thanks!

Berte

Amamama posted a comment on Friday 16th December 2005 6:25am

I started with The Time Of Destiny, as that one had an update today. I'm fairly new to this website, so I have some catching up to do, and I quite soon discovered that I needed some background story - so then I started reading this. And I must say I am impressed. You say this is your first HP fic, but it surely isn't your first fic? I love it, and I am most pleased with the way he got to know this new family in the neighbourhood, and the boost it gives Harry's self confidence. It is so nice when someone take the time to get to know you on your own terms, without the stupid, malicious gossip getting in the way (belive me, I know). The Asher family seems great, I look forward to getting to know them better myself, and Remus' proposal to Harry about becoming guardian is nothing but sweet. Finally they both have family they love and trust. Last, but not least, I absolutely love artist!Harry. He is such a sensitive and perceptive soul, of course there is an artist hidden in there, and I'm delighted you bring him out into the light. Hope to see more of that one!

Thanks!

Berte

Robin Westerly posted a comment on Thursday 15th December 2005 10:37am

sheesh! Who needs JKR. Loved it! Some one who finally explains properly how Harry becomes Uber Harry! One question, does anything develop on the metaphor possiblitity.
You also had a believable Harry, for which I cannot thank you enough!
You have a gift for battle scenes and action scenes unlike many fiction writers and you used it well. Sorry am being patronising.
Basically your story is so good it made me dance round there room squeaking!

Thank you thank you thank you

Cami posted a comment on Wednesday 14th December 2005 10:37am

minor nit-pik: there is a first year trying out for Quidditch, but first years aren't allowed to play. =)

Wooster posted a comment on Friday 9th December 2005 8:22pm

Best moment ever: Ron treating the compartment. I can just imagine the look of pride on his face. Perfect. Oh, and I imagine "Yo-ho-ho and a bottle of butterbeer," will be number one on the Billboard hit songs list next week? Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant story. But now I'm depressed. No more for me to read until you update ToD. *cries* Oh well. Hey, on the completely off-the-topic scale...ever seen Cinderella Man? Watched it tonight (saw it in theaters and HAD to buy the DVD) and it still gets me. Way down deep like truly great movies do. I highly reccommend it. Toodlepip, Wooster

AK posted a comment on Friday 9th December 2005 6:17pm

Woot! finished!
okay... the comments, lets forst get rid of what annoyed me: You use "OK" waayyyyyyy to often, I guess that word is used a lot in dialogs in real life but reading it so often was quite annoying. Oh and I am still not happy with you killin Casey, she was cool! and lastly, you sometimes use french word/sentences the problem is that using an online translator is a bad idea, you should get someone that speaks french to help you out (if you don't know anyone I'll help just send me any questions you might have)
My favorite part of the story was just after the death of Casey, I think you dealt with the angst part really nicely. I do think he got over her to easily, but what ever its you story you do what you want with it :)
Well I m gona stop with this review, I really enjoyed reading this story and its cool that your fanfic writing muscle stopped being rusty and I am sure will be getting better with the sequel.

AK posted a comment on Friday 9th December 2005 4:36pm

Just a quick note before the bigger one when I finish the story: Effondrement means collapse but has nothing to do with decomposition... it means collapse in the sense of a building collapsing, or in some cases someone falling.